Posted by Donald T. McCall on 6/21/2001, 12:52 pm Many times doggerel is interesting; onamonapoetica exist. Synonyms and homophones are interesting especially in the protoindoeuropean languages. And too, it must be said that Finnegan's Wake, early twentieth century icon as it is in stream of consciousnes certainly stands out as readable- in fact highly so in the hands of someone who also wrote "The Dubliners" and "Poertait of an Artist as a Young Man" Still. I find Andy Warhol, who tried his hand at the same, you will recall, as perfunctory in the same task. Still this concatenation "breaking", "smashing", etc. placed alongside flowery earthy imagery is interesting, much as reading the telephone book places family names and addreses of different cultures side by side. However it does not capture a poetic moment as a couplet might placed here and there. This is poetry in the sense that it looks like a collection of lines. Perhaps it could have all been said in one or two lines; repetition of the same thing over and again is tedious. This emptiness could be avoided by drawing on the strength of the beauty of a poem's rhyme, flow, sense of meter, consciousness expressed in paradox of the poem's transformation.
Critique
This collection of words has the look of a poem in the sense that it is broken into lines and those lines add up to say twenty or thirty lines placed together. One could insert at any point here a a new line as into stream of consciousness and hope it would fit the form of a poem, much as placing sticks together can sort of build a house and hope it will fill the space and serve the same as a house.
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